Since this blog has received a few new followers and submissions, I figure I ought to inform you fine followers as to why I’ve gone missing for the last three weeks or so. I can’t really go into specifics since I don’t have them and they’re not important anyways, but basically my brains gone all garbled and I’m having some trouble focusing on anything at all. I’m going to close down submissions on the blog until I can shake my brains back into position.
For those of you that are waiting, I apologize profusely both for the broken promise of swift reviews and the blatant lie that was my last post. I do promise to get them done, though, and I might be able to publish one or two of them tonight! If I can’t, please please be patient.
I’m so sorry guys.
My sincerest apologies to the two people waiting on reviews. It’ll be a short while still, unfortunately. If they are not up later today, I’ll have them done by tomorrow, for sure.
Have a lovely day, everyone.
((Hi! So I’ve been hesitant to submit Caaedo to many review blogs, since lots of people have automatic negative reactions for male tyrian bloods, even one in an AU like Caaedo, but after getting a good review from demfantrolls, I’ve decided to submit him to another blog! He’s a WIP right now, so suggestions are greatly appreciated.))
Understandable! I’m glad you’ve decided to submit, thank you. ouo
Your name is Caaedo Kumray, you are 8 sweeps old, have tyrian blood, and you’re a fugitive from the law.
Your bitter tale begins from grubhood, when to the Empress’s surprise, a male tyrian blood crawled out of the caves. Amused by this anomaly, she took you in and raised you as her own. You lived happily for years under her care, learning from the best tutors, having anything you wanted, and basically being spoiled rotten.
Unfortunately for you, the Empress is a paranoid thing and decided that you had to be culled when you became old enough to rebel against her.
There are some things I don’t know here, since this is for an AU, but in cannon the Empress culls all Tyrian Bloods when they come of age. They’re generally challenging her, but still. Thought it was worth saying.
It was a hard change when you had to leave.
How in the world did he escape? That definitely warrants some explanation.
You enjoy reading books like The Troll Odyssey, Anna Trollnina, To Kill A Winged Mocking Beast, and other literature of that caliber. You have an interest in jewelry making, too. You love how delicate a procedure putting it all together is. You frequently roleplay with your friends, but you can’t go out and FLARP with them, unfortunately. You live with an Indigoblood named Aggria Archua, since you can’t go home. Aggria’s a hard person to share a hive with, but you don’t mind. You’re horribly embarrassed to admit it, but you think you might actually be pale for her.
Hum, I think I’ve seen Aggria somewhere. The name sounds familiar.
I’m not sure trolls live together if they have any sort of choice in the matter. You may also want to explain how he came to live with her and why she doesn’t turn him over or just try and cull him. Highblooded land-dwellers and Sea-dwellers seem to be at odds with each other.
You’re often stuck at home, so you’ve learned to amuse yourself. You’ve basically tried every hobby you can think of. You’ve painted (terribly), cooked (you almost culled yourself), written (Aggria laughed so hard she almost passed out), and sewn, among other things.
Brought up in high society, you are extremely polite and try to conduct yourself like a gentleman. To highbloods, that is. You treat lowbloods like they’re meant to be treated. When in the company of lowbloods, you are condescending and cruel, but you’re still a gentleman, of course. Lowbloods won’t respect a rude seadweller. You can be spoiled and a bit of a wimp sometimes. It’s hard adjusting to a hive like Aggria’s, even though it’s considered lavish. You guess that nothing quite compares to the Imperial Palace.
Alright. I don’t think polite is a thing that’s associated with troll royalty. Feferi is polite, sure, but that has some limits.
I think fear is viewed as much more powerful than respect in Troll Society.
You don’t have a matesprit, not much on that front. You’d worry about it, but seeing as you’d probably get killed with or without genetical material if the drones discovered you, you try not to let it faze you. You’ve been feeling a twinge of deep loathing for a certain damned greenblood lately, so that’ll come into fruition hopefully. As you said earlier, you’ve felt pale for Aggria for a while, but you’d hate to be kicked out of the only place you have.
I’m going to assume all of these relationships, aside from Aggria, are on the internet, right?
Your Strife Specibus is Fistkind. You use weapons like your trusty brass knuckles or sometimes just your hands. You pride yourself on being trained in the martial arts by the best of the best. Your Fetch Modus is a Word Modus, and you must find an appropriate way to describe the item you want without specifically naming it. This keeps your brain alert and your vocabulary flavorful.
I think to use brass knuckles, he would also have to have that specibus. Strife Portfolio’s never stopped being a thing, though, and if he was spoiled rotten, I wouldn’t doubt that he’d have one.
Due to your status as a fugitive from the Alternian law, you masquerade as a purpleblood under the trolltag inquisitiveCavalier.
((Having trouble coming up with a quirk! Any suggestions?))
Quirks are difficult. I’d love to help you but I’m having a very hard time pinpointing his theme. The fact that he’s a fugitive seems to be the main thing, but I don’t really think that works as a theme. That’s an event that happened in the characters life.
When you play a certain game, your title is the Heir of Light. Your land is the Land of Jewels and Pillows (LOJAP), and your consorts are talkative sphinxes that lounge about.
((Caaedo is a lengthening of “cado” which means “fallen” or “to fall”, relating to his status as a sort of fallen prince. Kumray is an alternate spelling of Kumari, since I thought he might be a sort of kumari to the Empress and other trolls, celebrated but never expected to ascend to the throne.))
((Aaand this is all I have so far! Wanted some feedback that’ll hopefully point me on the right track.))
He seems a bit scattered to me, and since I don’t know much about the AU he’s meant for, there are a lot of things I’m unsure about. In cannon, if the empress bothered to raise a grub she found interesting and he some how escaped her after she had decided to cull him, he wouldn’t get very far. If he DID some how manage to hide, I don’t think he could hide for long. Particularly if he stayed in one place.
My advise to you is to just keep working on him, find a definite theme, and (assuming it doesn’t work with the AU) maybe consider having him move around a lot.
Thank you for submitting and if there is anything else I can help you with, please don’t hesitate to ask! Have a nice day.
Hello there! Let’s have a look.
==> Be the boring one.
Alright already, let’s get this over with, you don’t have all day. Your name is SIDERE GALILE, and you are just shy of nine sweeps old. You are what many people would consider boring. While your friends are out FLARPing or tinkering with something or other, you spend most of your time watching the skies with your handy array of telescopes. You’ve been an avid astronomer for as long as you can remember, even having your HIVE built as a long, narrow observation tower for better celestial viewing. Most of the floors are just an excuse to add more height and are empty or filled with old star charts, telescopes, and other astronomy materials. The top floor is enclosed in panels that can be easily removed to offer a 360° view of the sky for viewing purposes. Located in a prairie-like terrain, there’s nothing tall enough to distract you from your nightly surveillance. It’s also a good home for your lusus, a SPECTACLED HOOTBEAST. She can fetch you small items, and her earsplitting screeches work as an effective alarm clock. If only she wasn’t constantly regurgitating half-digested meals.
When describing her hive, maybe replace “long” with “tall”. You say it’s a tower, but with the long in there, I think it would be horizontal.
Oh gosh, I love Spectacled Owls! Very neat!
As a yellow-blood, you are privy to a psychic ability, although it’s mostly useless for fighting. You only have the power of PSYCHIC NAVIGATION, which allows you to zone in on a target and track its location across distances and keeps you from getting lost wherever you are. If you do run into trouble, you can count on your SCOPEKIND specibus to see you through. Originally a small telescope you keep on hand, it transforms into a nifty BILLY CLUB that can do some serious damage to an opponent. Or, there’s always a good chance of you harming someone with your fetch modus. You use the ORBIT MODUS, although it’s rather difficult to get the hang of. One item is captchalogued as the center, with your other cards orbiting around it. Adding or removing items can have horrible effects, sometimes causing cards to collide with each other and severely damage or destroy the items within. You’re far too afraid to remove the center card, which contains your favorite coffee mug. That thing could really use a wash by now.
I like that modus quite a lot.
Although you’re usually very hostile to anyone who would dare interrupt you as you watch the heavens, you do make the rare exception for those of great importance. Mainly your MOIRAIL, an orange-blooded troll by the name of Piazzi Nostra, and Temeno Geweer, a blue-blood with whom you’ve started a fledgeling MATESPRITESHIP. You enjoy astronomy, keeping a clean and organized hive, science books and how-to guides, coffee with grub sauce, and sour foods. You loathe being interrupted, red romance fiction novels, and scientifically inaccurate movies-especially the abysmal TROLLSFORMERS series. You tend to have a short temper and a one-track mind when it comes to your interests, but you are very efficient and have no qualms about taking charge of a situation. Rapidly approaching adulthood, you’re hoping to secure a position as a navigator on one of the fleet’s ships. Your trolltag is celestialSurveillant, and you like to *~~ sandwich your words between shooting stars *~~
Name: Sidere Galile
Age: 8.9 sweeps
Symbol: Symbol: ♄
Blood: Yellow; Hex Code #CBCB15
Power: Psychic Navigation
Quirk: *~~ sandwiches words between shooting stars; no capitalization *~~
(I was gonna change all the o’s to *’s, but then I realized that it just looked like she was constantly swearing and censoring herself.)
Lusus: Spectacled owl
Strife Specibus: Scopekind; weapon is billy club
Fetch Modus: Orbit
Hive: Observation tower in prairie
Quadrants: Moirail-Piazzi Nostra, Matesprite-Temeno Geweer, looking for a kismesis
Likes: Astronomy, technical books, coffee, sour food, organization
Dislikes: Romance novels, interruptions, clutter, scientifically inaccurate movies
Strengths: Efficient, neat, take-charge, smart
Flaws: Bossy, short-tempered, tunnel vision, impatient, rarely takes risks
Title: Seer of Void
Planet: Land of Rings and Ice
Well, I don’t have much to say at all! This is a very nice, believable troll. Great job! I’m sorry It wasn’t much of a review. If there’s anything else I can help you with, please don’t hesitate to ask! Have a lovely day.
Sounds neat! I’d take care to at least make the gills look normal, though. Obvious defects generally lead to culling.
Well! Perhaps you could simplify a popular labyrinth design? Pardon the horrible doodle examples, please.
If you’d prefer something that has a predetermined meaning, maybe the constellation Circinus (the compass) could work, again tying into the Labyrinth thing.
This might be grasping at straws, Europa’s symbol is a possibility.
In a myth other than the one where he fathered the Minotaur, he carried Europa to safety.
Hello everyone! I’m working on the submissions now.
When I read that I had flashbacks to myself as a child becoming increasingly frustrated at my inability to properly walk on all fours.